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honestly I find it point on. Often we get short changed in what we provide cause there are venue managers and plannners who supposedly know better than us.
 
The first line is opinionated and not necessary.

You may be looking for a DJ but Sheila and I found that most brides need someone that can do more than just push play.

You’ll have peace of mind that we will coordinate with the other wedding professionals to make sure our part is flawless.

We can take care of your ceremony music either live, on CD or both. Everyone will hear the officiant and the vows with our lavaliere microphones.

Besides a DJ, you can have live dinner music, DJ light show for the dance floor and many other amenities.



The blinking background is distracting.
 
First off, I'll second Hank on the background. If the background is distracting it won't matter what the text says, nobody will read it anyhow.

There's a lot of extra fluff in the responses to the questions. For example:
"The Mobile DJ Light Show is a very portable system that was developed by one of the nations’ top lighting designer who worked for over 25 years in Radio City Music Hall. The fixtures are managed by us via the programmed controller.

We are able to control the colors, patterns and speed of the ‘intelligent’ DMX lights to match the tempo and style of the songs we play. From retirees dancing to big band and crooners to teens bringing sexy back, it works for all types of music."

The part in red, most people would probably care less and its more useless text (interesting, but belongs in the "if I ever get on Jeoprady category" of facts).


"For dancing, the typical house system will be inadequate. If you still really want us to do that, the rate will be triple and we will not be responsible for sound quality issues. It’s much easier and cheaper for us to bring in our own gear than to purchase additional insurance, walk-through the facility with the banquet sales manager and then filing a statement after the event.

Also, please don’t ask us to stand by the light switches and flip them off and on quickly instead of bringing in the DJ light show. That would be just as silly! LOL!"

Once again, the part in red is more "fluff" text.

If you were going to include the part in blue, place it under the lighting question.

All in all, I don't think it's a bad page, but there's a lot of text that just doesn't need to be there and in this day and age of technology, people want the information they want and they want it with as few delays as possible. Basically the good ole KISS principle.
 
I am gonna put a plus one with Hank's critique. I also would pick three different questions. more realistic questions although I know they get asked just not that frequently. Maybe, "What will I get for my money?" or " How can I be sure Mobile Music 1 is the right choice for my wedding?" or " I am very involved in the planning of my wedding, Can Mobile Music 1 work with my budget and ideas?"

I just think the questions you ask are ok but seem to protray a lack of experience, I know you have the experience but seems those questions are asked of a newer company. You get what I mean?

Good luck will be up that way in Sept. again!
Paul
 
Stick with the Positives and Sell!

You asked for a critique of the text of the "Disc Jockey FAQs" portion of the page to which you linked, so here goes. I am ignoring the changing background and the fact that this portion of the page loaded in the bottom fifth of my screen, which is set to its optimal resolution at 1440x900 pixels.

I think that the topics you chose are likely of interest to your prospective clients. However, the answers are not very clear. You have straightforward questions and ambiguous answers. I also noticed some negativity on the page regarding house systems and light switches, and I would remove all that. I do not think that there is any place for negativity in selling. Besides, the light switch comment seems out-of-place and irrelevant from the discussion. Of course, you could always consider a new question about light switches and put a positive spin on the topic.

And now, for the nitty-gritty. The following is a breakdown of each question:

Do you bring your own equipment?
A simple "yes" is in order here. You can additionally list what you do bring or save that as another question.

What is the DJ light show?
That is a great question and you do not answer it here. Consider explaining more about what the fixtures do and how they enhance the atmosphere of the space/room, rather than the history behind it.

Will you plug into the house system?
You have your own equipment, so what is the point to this question? If you need to be in two places at the same time, consider having Sheila run a second setup in the other room for an additional fee.


Overall, I think that you should reconsider your audience. People want straightforward answers to their straightforward questions. They want to know what they are getting for their money. Consider revising your FAQ page to include questions clients have asked at meetings, and answer those questions as if those clients were sitting right in front of you.

Remember that the purpose of the website is to sell to prospective clients. In many cases, the website is a potential client's first impression of you. What do you want them to know? Again, be sure to keep things in a postive tone. A positive attitude sells better than a wet blanket.
 
It is an informative page, but there are three things I would change:

The Mobile DJ Light Show is a very portable system that was developed by one of the nations’ top lighting designer who worked for over 25 years in Radio City Music Hall. To most clients including myself, this statement is not necessary. Are you bringing out 4 moving heads on global truss? I did not see any photos/vids showing this. Since there is no evidence (photos/vids) on the website that supports a light show that would make me think it was developed by the nations top lighting designer, IMO it does more harm to make this statement. It is almost as if you have to say it, because visitors would not believe it just from the photos and videos. I think photos/videos would do this statement better justice.

For dancing, the typical house system will be inadequate. If you still really want us to do that, the rate will be triple and we will not be responsible for sound quality issues. It’s much easier and cheaper for us to bring in our own gear than to purchase additional insurance, walk-through the facility with the banquet sales manager and then filing a statement after the event. I am not sure about your area, but in mine typically plugging into the house system is not ever brought up. I think the conflict with this statement is on perception. IMO, if I were a visitor and read that sentence I would immediately think, "oh people ask them all the time if they plug into house systems, which means they bring less equipment, which means people must negotiate with them all the time." This might have people trying to take a second bite at the apple.

Also, please don’t ask us to stand by the light switches and flip them off and on quickly instead of bringing in the DJ light show. That would be just as silly! LOL! I sense some annimosity in this statement, did you have someone inquiry and say that? I think this statement does just as much harm as the one above (once again going back to perception). I think this should be taken out completely.
 
I'm still here, just been a bit busy lately.

Gone is the mention of Bill@ESC and will probably reword a little bit more later on.

If the tongue-in-cheek does turn away a stuffy bride, so be it. Do I really want a client that is really uptight naturally?
 
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